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Wethers and Well Worn by ~Dumb-Poet:iconDumb-Poet:





She peers down
Through the sunspots and sorrow
At the faded X tattoo
Stretched from knuckles to wrist.
Wonders were the fortitude went
After all those years,
But banishes old thoughts
With another shot of whiskey
From a half-empty bottle.

The door creaks.
He enters with loosened tie
Casting a briefcase to the corner.
She peers up
Through drunken apology
At his vague double image,
Receives forgiveness from that
Knowing smile
       And familiar chuckle.
For he’s just as guilty
Whispers the encircled A
Inked into his calf
        So long ago

“We’re all wethers
           and well worn.”

The thought threatens to ruin him,
But she offers reprieve
With 90 proof kisses
And a bottle half full.
©2004-2009 ~Dumb-Poet
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Author's Comments

This is my submision for a little friendly competition between me and my fellow poet Sui-Generis [link] The parameters being:
1) Use the word wether in context in a poem.
Wether: weth·er n. A castrated ram.
2) Submissions will be made on friday. There is, as far as I know, no winner. Its just friendly competition to further improve our skills. Comments on both poems will be muchly appreciated, especialy pertaining to the applicable parameter.
*Note: Check the comments in my poem "The Nostalgia" if you have further interest in how this came about and I would suggest that you read some of Sui-Genereis's [link] poems (check my favorites, destincitve font on white background on the thumbnail) also as she is an amazing poet.
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Another thing needs to be discussed for understanding of the poem. There is a current movement within the punk culture known as straight edge, the basis of which is abstinence from sex, drugs, alchohol, generaly any vice thought to be associated with rock music. Straight edge people generaly draw or tattoo X's on the back of thier hand [link] and have many interesting variations of the X symbol.


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:icontuffaxware:
well fuck!...i really like this like seriously! i noticed the brifecase-anarchy tattoo! def a new fav!
XXX
LALA KOALA
:icontuffaxware:
AND ..is this about you and i??
xxx
LALA
:icondumb-poet:
:p I must admit the characters are a bit inspired by our particular affiliations but not to the extent where I would say they are you and me. How ever this is the wrong version:(... I need to repost it it correctly and that version is on my dads lap top... I have stored it in scraps for now. The other version is much better:)

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:altermind: ~DevUnity: We ARE what it takes*

(*that means you)
:icono0sui-generis0o:
Is this the final now?

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oh, wouldn't it be loverly?

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:icondumb-poet:
This is the final version:)

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:altermind: ~DevUnity: We ARE what it takes*

(*that means you)
:iconjovie:
Hunter, i love your work, Love you babe
:icondumb-poet:
Thank you:)

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:altermind: ~DevUnity: We ARE what it takes*

(*that means you)
:icono0sui-generis0o:
Okay, for right now I'll just say that I love it, but I'll give a full comment upon my return from St. Louis. Have an awesome weekend!
~bec

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oh, wouldn't it be loverly?

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